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"Maybe I'm getting sick..." Pokey thought "Yeah, that must be it..." He turned the faucet of the sink he was facing on to cold, and washed his face. When he was finished, he turned it off, then walked out to the hallway. He looked at a clock, "12:18... Lunch is almost over..." he said to himself. Pokey walked to class, and by the time he got there he was feeling nauseous. He sat down at his desk, once again holding his head. His teacher was sitting at her desk, grading papers, when she noticed Pokey sitting there.

"Are you alright, Pokey?" she asked.

"I'm just... Feeling sick." he replied.

"Well, would you like me to call your parents to pick you up?"

Pokey nodded, his eyes shut tight, still holding his head with his left hand, "Yeah..."

His mother was called, and she came to pick him up. She and Pokey's teacher talked about Onett's state while Pokey grabbed all of his things to go home.

"Did you get everything? I don't want to have to come back here, you know..." Lardna said.

"... Yes." he responded.

They walked out of the classroom, down the hallway, and to the car. Once they got in, Lardna told Pokey that his father will be very upset with him. She told him that since his grades were slipping he couldn't afford to miss that much school. They got home, and Lardna parked the car behind the house. Pokey got out, and started walking toward the front door. Lardna followed him closely by, carrying a bag of groceries. When they got inside, Pokey started to head upstairs to get some rest, but was stopped by his mother,

"Sweetie, you look so pale, are you OK?"

Pokey stared at her, "No, mom, I feel like I'm going to pass out."

Lardna looked at Pokey, "Do you want something to eat?" she said, seeming rather apathetic.

Pokey nodded, then went up to his room to sleep.
yep this one's short, but the next will most likely be pretty long.


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OsHoshi Jul 16, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
so his mother is actually nice to him..? o.o
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Mystafreya Jul 17, 2009  Student Digital Artist
well...

yes, and no.

I'm trying to make it so her attitude toward taking care of them is more of an obligation of sorts. like, she doesn't rly care... and yet she does.

idk it's confusing.
and basically, I'm giving their parents the attitude that mine have on occasion lol
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OsHoshi Jul 17, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
ah, i see..

Well, these stories are pretty just scripts, right? You can write them even simpler..

Setting: The Minch house. Patio (or yard, whatever)

Lardna has just parked the car & the minch bros get off the car running like crazy

Picky: Porky! Give me back mah lunch bag~~~

They run around & Picky trips &--

you get my point XDD

Well, idk, i'm just givin u ideas to make it easier for you *shrugs*
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Mystafreya Jul 19, 2009  Student Digital Artist
I thought of that... but I prefer it if it's more like it's a story too
besides, if I get anything like details and stuff I can actually write them down, and elaborate better.
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Wow. Nicely done. The title sure seems an improvement too, in my opinion.
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